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Uncle

發言人:Joy, on Apr/09/2019    09:04:55 (IP code: X.X.53.24)
 

We used to call him "Uncle" everyone admired him for his being humorous and funny all time. Wherever he'd appeared the atmosphere was as cheerful as a gaily relaxed party.

On a winter day some year, we wanted to celebrate a business victory, someone proposed to have a big 燒酒雞 feast. Uncle came in center and front saying no, no, no, with his head and hands slowly turning left and right, shaking.

"I had a chicken pet when I was a kid. My heart sank and I burst into tears the day my mother put her on the dish. No, no, no, never would I eat chicken for rest of my life." adds Uncle, again, shaking his head and hands much more firmly.

That was the first and only time that Uncle saying No to everyone as I can recall.

 

Record ID: 1554771895   From: 台灣

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回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    13:19:37 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 >>I feel so embarrassed...
Don't be.
Like I said, sometimes we can not see our mistakes clearly.


>>I just spent less 10 minutes writing "Uncle"...
That's a proof you are good at English. You should be proud of yourself for writing an article using just 10 mins.

>>Now I found I've put myself a good joke in front of everybody la.
Not at all.
Besides, this thread of yours is almost no more visitors except me.
That's why I bring up the discursion with you.

Anyway, See you later.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R082   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    13:35:21 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 z,

See you later.
Thank you isn't enough to express how I'm grateful for your doings and consideration.

I'll repost "Uncle" later of today. Please come up here to see if it's better.^^
 

Record ID: 1554771895R083   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    14:02:35 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 
You are welcome.

And, immediately I can see your writings has improved.

Why?
I guess you know English very well in the first place, but get a little rusty,
and just need a little bit time to get used to using English again.
That's all.

>>Please come up here to see if it's better.

Definitely it will be better.

See you.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R084   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    17:55:11 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 



We used to call him “Uncle”. Everyone liked him because he was always humorous and funny. Whenever he was, he had relaxing and cheerful air around him, and so, brought in laughters.

On a winter day in the 1990s, we planned to celebrate a business victory, so someone proposed to have a big 燒酒雞feast. Uncle came in center and front saying, "No, no, no." with his head and hands slowly turning from left to right, to and fro.

"I had a chicken pet when I was a kid. My heart sank and I burst into tears the day my mother put her on the dish. No, no, no, never would I eat chicken in my life." added Uncle, gesturally more firmly.

That was the first and the only time that Uncle saying No to everyone as I can recall.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R085   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    18:11:18 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 Dear z,

I've modified the original prose into a new one as shown in R085.

Before this, I actually put myself amongst some English articles first and then felt confident to do the modification.

I won't put R085 framed until you've read it and given your comment.^^
 

Record ID: 1554771895R086   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    20:21:32 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 We called him “Uncle.” Everyone liked him because he was always humorous and funny. Whenever he was in our workplace, a ball of relaxing and cheerful air was around him, bringing in waves of laughter to the co-workers close to him.

On a winter day in the 1990s, we planned to celebrate a business victory, and someone proposed to have a big 燒酒雞feast. Then, Uncle came in center and front saying, "No, no, no," with his head and hands slowly turning from left to right, to and fro. and

"I used to have a chicken pet when I was a kid. My heart sank, and I burst into tears the day my mother putting her on a dish." Uncle added with a firmer gesture and an angry yet sad tone.

That was the first and the only time that Uncle had ever said no to everyone as I can recall.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R087   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    20:24:27 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 'Uncle added with a firmer gesture and an angry yet sad tone. '

=>

'Uncle added with a firmer gesture and angry yet sad tone. '
 

Record ID: 1554771895R088   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    20:34:38 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 Uncle came in 'center and front'

'a business victory'

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I don't like those terms,
but I failed to find an appropriate synonym for each of them.


I just try to get rid of part of the grammar errors,....
There are more things in this article needed to be taken care of.

So, that's all.
Hope it is helpful, though.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R089   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    20:35:40 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 z,

R087 is a wonderful piece of work.
I've realized it'll take time for me to learn how to write well and correctly.

Thank you very much for showing me such a good example of writing.

Do you mind if I use your R087 as a brand new version instead of R000?
 

Record ID: 1554771895R090   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    20:40:17 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 OK. R088 & R089 noted. Thanks.

Let me think and try over again.

I'll try it right away.

See you later.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R091   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    21:03:00 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 We called him "Uncle." Everyone liked him because he was always humorous and funny. Whenever he was in our workplace, a ball of relaxing and cheerful air was around him, bringing in waves of laughter to the co-workers close to him.

On a winter day in the 1990s, we planned to celebrate a business achievement, and someone proposed to have a big 燒酒雞feast. Then, Uncle came forth saying, "No, no, no," with his head and hands slowly turning from left to right, to and fro.

"I used to have a chicken pet when I was a kid. My heart sank, and I burst into tears the day my mother putting her on a dish." Uncle added with a firmer gesture and angry yet sad tone.

That was the first and the only time that Uncle had ever said no to everyone as I can recall.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R092   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    21:25:04 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 >>Do you mind if I ....

Why should I mind? That is your article. I just helped.

So, go ahead, do whatever you want with it.

By the way,
in case you want to put it in a new thread for other people to read,

could you please don't mention my involvements?

Appreciate it. ^^







 

Record ID: 1554771895R093   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    21:40:04 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 R092 looks excellent to me.
Good job. ^^

Have to be honest with you, I can not revise your article on my own, though.

I went to the internet, found the syntaxes of some words' usages, put them together, and finally modified your grammar-errors.

So, thank the almighty internet. ^^
 

Record ID: 1554771895R094   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    21:45:04 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 Dear z,

Don't worry about R093. I won't put it in a new thread.
I'm not qualified to show people of my English writings.
Actually, from your wonderful help, I've found there's far more than I thought that I have to learn how to write well.

And still, I'm not sure whether R092 is better than R087.
I think I need more time to figure it out.

If I fail, then R087 is the final work of this article.^^
 

Record ID: 1554771895R095   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    21:47:46 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 hahaha...R094, I see.

Thanks very much. I'll put it in the next column.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R096   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    21:55:24 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 

We called him "Uncle." Everyone liked him because he was always humorous and funny. Whenever he was in our workplace, a ball of relaxing and cheerful air was around him, bringing in waves of laughter to the co-workers close to him.

On a winter day in the 1990s, we planned to celebrate a business achievement, and someone proposed to have a big 燒酒雞feast. Then, Uncle came forth saying, "No, no, no," with his head and hands slowly turning from left to right, to and fro.

"I used to have a chicken pet when I was a kid. My heart sank, and I burst into tears the day my mother putting her on a dish." Uncle added with a firmer gesture and angry yet sad tone.

That was the first and the only time that Uncle had ever said no to everyone as I can recall.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R097   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    22:23:44 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 >>I think I need more time to figure it out.

Good spirit.





 

Record ID: 1554771895R098   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/12/2019    22:25:51 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 

Anyway, let's call it a day.

I see you later. Cheers.
 

Record ID: 1554771895R099   From: 加拿大

回信 發言人:Joy, on Apr/12/2019    22:43:04 (IP code: X.X.213.229)
 z,

I've read R097 for several times and studied carefully the grammars and sentences within it.
Then I scrolled up to R085 to see the differences. I've learned a lot!

I'll remind myself to keep reading English novels and build a habit of English written as well.

It's been a wonderful and meaningful day you've brought to me. Thank you again.


 

Record ID: 1554771895R100   From: 台灣

回信 發言人:z, on Apr/14/2019    00:13:00 (IP code: X.X.229.28)
 You are welcome, la. ^_^ 

Record ID: 1554771895R101   From: 加拿大

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